Showing posts with label Week 3. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Week 3. Show all posts

Tuesday, September 5, 2017

Feedback Strategies

I read the articles

The Difference Between Praise and Feedback

and


My biggest thing with feedback is being specific about it.  My favorite of the articles I read was Specific Feedback that Helps Learning because I couldn't agree more with it.  Feedback should, in my opinion, contain two major points.  It should include the best part of the person's work and how they did it right, and the other is the worst part of the person's work and how they might improve.  This gives much more perspective for the student looking to see how a teacher/peer sees their work.  Feedback is supposed to help grow a person, thus focusing on what they do best and worst gives them both worlds.  Not only will they do what they do well, but they will do better at what they don'd do well at.

I am also a huge believer in process praise.  A student that isn't challenging themselves should not be praised by their effort, because there was very little effort.  Praise for work is the best praise.  At the end of the day, it doesn't matter how gifted a student is, it is how willing they are to keep improving themselves!

Praise picture: sourced via Pixabay

Monday, September 4, 2017

Topic Research for Dante's Inferno

I have chosen to research Dante's Inferno more in depth for my storybook project.

Story Ideas:

Hell on Earth:  This story will focus on how Dante's Inferno is not a place where one goes, but rather a hell that one brings upon themselves through their life choices.  I am thinking I would either do this as a style like that in the song "Guilty Conscience" by Eminem, where the hell is described from a first-person point of view from each person at different levels, or in a style similar to A Christmas Carol where it is more of a third-person perspective.  I think the best basis for the different levels would be Dante's Inferno's 9 circles of hell, because there are quite concrete requirements for each level of hell.  I would modify the exact requirements, but it would be based off this and have fewer levels to keep things shorter.
Ghost with Scrooge in A Christmas Carol: sourced via Wikipedia



Hell in Higher Ed:  This story will be a more comedic style where it is once again either a first-person or third-person perspective of students in college and the different levels of hell that they might experience.  This would either be based upon the major chosen or the year in college they are in.  It will cover the struggles college students go through with their daily lives.  I would obviously be creating my own standards for the different levels of this sort of "hell".

A Way Out: This story will be focused on the concept of a system of hell with different levels and ways out of each of them.  I have found it quite hard to find other literature that cover a topic such as this, which makes things difficult, but also quite exciting!  The closest I could think of or find is the concept of Purgatory, which is more of a limbo state where one can still repent from their sins and save themselves from hell.  This system will not be purgatory, but an actual hell with multiple layers and ways out of them.  This will be either descriptive or from a first person account.


Week 3 Story: Eve, Savior of Man and Founder of Science

Eve, Savior of Man and Founder of Science
By: Connor Dugan

I was nothing, and then I was.  Of flesh and bone God created me.  He told me my name is Adam, and to save me from loneliness, gave me Eve, my partner.  The world he put me in was beautiful.  Not a care in the world, not a problem in sight.

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Adam and Eve in Paradise: sourced via Wikipedia

While we played and rejoiced in this bountiful place, I felt confused.  Later, I will find that Eve shared equal confusion.  We knew of nothing but this beautiful place.  Thus, we truly could not respect it for what it was.  We were born in paradise, lived in paradise, and for all we cared there was nothing but just that.  Oh how things have changed.  For good and for bad.  For we were given one command from God, and that was to not eat of the tree of knowledge.

I was always curious why God didn't want us to eat from the tree of knowledge.  After all, wouldn't God be proud of us for growing up to be like him?  Is there no room for company in the heavenly creations?  He never told us why, only that we would be doomed to death if we ate from it.  My curiosity was passionate, but Eve's, I'm afraid, was devastating.  I could tell in advance that she was tempted more than I to break our promise.  I told her to not even get within the vicinity of the tree... But it was not enough.

While I was gathering fruit for her, Eve wandered near the tree of knowledge.  After some conversation with the serpent, she was convinced to break her promise with me and went up to the tree.  This was the point of no return, for I had told her she would die if she got that close, and once she learned that I had stretched the truth, she had to know what the fruit would do to her.  She ate of it, and a blinding light came from the tree.  I believed God had set a fire of a million suns upon the tree to destroy our temptation, but later discovered it was eve who had transformed into a god herself.

I asked her what happened, and she said to me "Come, you have much to learn.".  The world shook, the vibrations levitated the oceans, and God came from the heavens screaming for her to stop.  All of reality collapsed, Eve took me aside to a third perspective, and the universe exploded.  I watched it spawn from nothing into a rapidly expanding, blazing hot, energy filled shape.  She called it the "universe", and said it is made of energy that is a fundamental part of it.  This energy can take many different forms, but it all comes from the same origin: the love she has for knowledge, the universe, and its inhabitants.  I watched the energy attract each other, form particles and gases, they collected and formed beautifully powerful spheres of radiating energy, some of these spheres would then collapse and form new, heavier particles, and the universe spread out into the most spectacular and beautifully complex existence I had ever seen.

I asked Eve why she did this.  Why would she overthrow God, and why would she create a place like this?  She told me that the knowledge from the fruit tree was the greatest gift she had ever been given.  Eating that fruit gave life meaning.  She told me that God had been so focused on making everything good and happy that he lost his focus on making everything worth experiencing.  She told me that I will love deeper if there is an opposite that she called "hate", that I would be happier if there was "sadness", and most importantly, that I would see existence as precious if there was "death".

I was shocked, amazed, frightened, and happy that I would get to experience this exciting and complex world.  "Eve, this is incredible!  Where do I start?  What body of mass shall I inhabit?  What fruit shall I be given?  What can I do what can't I do?  I am so excited to be the first to experience your creation!".  She looked at me, smiling.  She said softly, "Adam, this world has rules.  It has properties of logic, and no one may defy them.  This universe is an incredibly complex system that only stems from basic laws that must never be changed.  You will experience this world, but not in the form God made you.  Adam, this is our new home.  Soon, I will dissipate our souls, and we will reside in this universe as "consciousness".  We will only experience this world through the eyes of the life created by these laws."  I couldn't really understand what that meant.. But I trusted her.  She explained further that life would rise from the nonliving matter in the right conditions, and will take much time to develop into anything like they already currently were.  She said it would be much more rewarding this way, that they would experience all like in the entire universe simultaneously at any given moment, and experience the world in a linear fashion called "time".

Both of us were scared, for we knew horrible things could and would happen during our journey through the billions of years of existence in this universe.  But it would all be worth it, and it began with Eve's words, "Let it begin".

Author's note:

In the original story, Adam and Eve are created by God and are placed in the Garden of Eden where they could be in happiness forever, but that changed when they disobeyed God's only command: to not eat of the tree of knowledge.  God punishes them by casting them out of the garden and making them mortal and this is seen as a terrible and horrific occurrence.  I wanted to make a story where knowledge is seen as a blessing upon mankind, and that the bad parts of life are necessary for us to be happy and appreciate the world, and that Eve was heroic in a way.

Bibliography:

The Story of Adam and Eve, Part A, by Ginzberg


Thursday, August 31, 2017

Reading Notes for Adam and Eve part B

I focused on a broad amount of the story for this part.  I would condense the story a lot so the whole thing can be read as a short story of appropriate length.

Adam and Eve are cast out of the garden and into the western part of the earth.  There they were to dwell in a cave and be cast away for 5000 years and 500 days.  They feel terrible and die of extreme sorrow.  God, out of the grace of his heart, revives them.  Adam pleads with god to help them survive and god makes all the beasts in the world not trouble Adam and Eve.  Adam then gets mad at Eve as they look back at the garden and condemns her for punishing them and their future generations.  They experience great sorrow and kill themselves by jumping into water.  God revives them again and explains to them that they now need water to survive because they were cast out of the garden.  Adam and Eve go back into the cave and Adam rants about how great the garden was and how horrible their new lives are and kills himself by throwing himself on the ground.  God revives him again, and Adam then asks why god has cast them into darkness.  God explains that it will not last forever, but keeps his promise to not let him back into the garden for 5000 years and 500 days.  Adam and Eve kill themselves one more time by jumping off a mountain and god revives them and says to not do it again.

I would take this story and put it into the context of a child in school playing on a playground and doing something he isn't supposed to with one of his friends.  The offence not only bans them from the part of the playground they were playing on, but gets them sent back into the classroom.  Similar accusations/conversations between the two occur and they fall asleep from boredom instead of die.  They think they will never be able to go back to the playground but they can, they just can't go back to the good part of the playground for five and a half days.

Bibliography

Adam and Eve Part B, Book of Adam and Eve

Child Being Punished sourced via Flickr

Wednesday, August 30, 2017

Reading Notes for Adam and Eve: Fall of Man Part A



I will be focusing on the Fall of Man chapter in the story of Adam and Eve, by Ginzberg

During the creation of the universe, god creates Adam and Eve to rule over everything that is created.  All creatures, living things, and non living things are for the rule of man.  They are placed in paradise (Garden of Eden) where they have everything they could ever want.  The tree of life is the center of attention in this place, which is a GIGANTIC tree where all the water that irrigates the earth flows.  The other tree, however, is strictly forbidden.  The tree of knowledge.  God promises Adam and Eve that they will be killed if they eat from it.

One day, an evil serpent, Satan, comes to Eve to try to trick her into eating from the tree of knowledge.  She gives in, feels bad and lonely, and proceeds to give the fruit to Adam and all the other creatures she could so they would all suffer the same fate.  God punishes them by making them naked and mortal.

I think I will play off this by having Eve become a god herself when she eats from the tree of knowledge.  She then takes over and creates science and makes the world infinitely more complex than that of the original god.  She forms the world out of fundamental particles and energy rather than elements such as "earth, wind, and fire".  She creates limits such as the speed of light and the Planck length.  She creates basic laws that compound into the beautifully complex scientific field that humanity has to explore.  She forever makes the world interesting.  Always having something else for man to discover.  And it becomes the greatest gift to humanity ever given.  Because Eve decided the world was worth knowing about.  Adam will not eat the fruit in this story, but will witness and give his account of what happened when Eve becomes a god of knowledge.

Bibliography

 Fall of Man chapter in the story of Adam and Eve, by Ginzberg

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Adam and Eve sourced via Wikipedia